2013-03-31

Three Types of Vacations - (3) - Final Version

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    There are three types of vacations which are divided from the distance to the destination. The first type is domestic vacation. The domestic vacation usually spent >lasts about three days to seven days. Therefore, the cost is comparatively >relatively lower; and there are more scenery we can enjoy. We can leisurely and slowly enjoy the marvelous landscapes. For example, in Taiwan, if we live in Taipei and we want to arrange a domestic vacation, we can go to the midst of Taiwan, such as Taichung, Changhua and Nantou. In addition, if we keep going south, we can go to Yunlin, Chiaya and Tainan; until we reach the south district Kaohsiung and Pingtung. Taking the THSR or TRA is the most convenient way we can choose; we can only spend about two to three hours taking the THSR to the farthest district. Driving a car is also an easy and usual way to travel. It cannot >will not be limited by the place where the train or bus cannot arrive at. For example, I had a pretty wonderful time with my family this New Year vacation. My parents took us to Changhua, Yunlin and Chiaya to have a three-day family trip. We went to many sightworthy >breathtaking landscapes where were not so crowded, such as “寒溪泥”, “萬年峽谷” and “五元二角”. The trip not only cost economically but also gave me countless pleasant memories.  Choosing two or three districts to sightsee does not take too much time and cost >money. Moreover, we can enjoy the views much deeply.
    The second type of vacation is travelling in the neighboring countries. It generally takes about five days to ten days. Consequently, the cost will be more expensive than the domestic vacation’s cost; but we can only have a few views due to the higher cost of the air tickets and traveling expenses. Joining a tour group can save us a lot of money; however, we cannot enjoy our free time because of catching up the travel schedule. Most of the Taiwanese will take Korea, Japan, China, Singapore, Indonesia or Malaysia to >as their first time travel country. In many neighboring countries, I have >had gone to Indonesia, Malaysia and Thailand since >when I was a child. I extremely love to travel to the Southeast Asia. The warm and genial sunshine, the pearl-white beach, the tasty and refreshing coconut milk, the lively and lighthearted music and the relaxed >relaxing and simple lifestyle in Southeast Asia were all my biases >favorites and made me linger on with no thought of leaving. If I have enough money and time, I will spend my vacation there again.
The third type of vacation is traveling in the countries which do not belong to Asia. Generally speaking, it takes about ten days or even two months. Therefore, it takes the most >more money and time; hence, it must have its difficulty. Half of the Taiwanese cannot afford the high payment of traveling to Europe, America even Australia. If we want to reach these places, the first thing we need to solve is the cost of air ticket. It must spend >usually costs beyond twenty thousands. From the viewpoint of normal Taiwan people, twenty thousand may be their income in a month. Needless to say, the payment >cost of the whole journey must be so high that no normal >average Taiwanese People can afford it. Take myself for an example, I have never gone to the countries which do not belong to Asia. If the whole circumstance was possible for me to go abroad, I must absolutely seize the chance. 
To sum up, the experiences and memories which we get from the journey >travelling cannot be measured by money. These invisible harvests can widely extend our experiences and knowledge, open our view and even enrich our life. They are fairly significant and just like an irreplaceable treasure in our living. No matter what kind of travel, they must have their values and are worth trying. It is better to travel far than to read voluminously. If in the future you have the chance to travel, no matter to foreign or domestic countries, please do not hesitate, just pack up your baggage and then go your way. You will discover that you get more that you think!

2013-03-27

New Year’s Resolution – Get up Early (2)



PEER REVIEW FOR ESSAYS
  • What part needs the most attention in the next draft?
    1.Supporting the last part with more examples.(by Corina)
    2.Maybe she can describe more details on the essay.(by Lisa)
    
    
    When I was a senior high school student, I needed to get up at 5 o’clock to take buses everyday because of the remote school. After I got into college, I felt I can get more freedom than before. Therefore, I started to let myself loose. I did not almost go to the first class at eight o’clock, because I gradually cannot get up at six o’clock in the latest one year.
    I had a bad habit of doing things dilatorily. Every time after I came home, I was first used to play computer, have a dinner and watch television. When I realized that I had homework to do, it was usually about ten or eleven o’clock. Then I would reluctantly sit at the desk, started to do what I should do. I did not finish my homework until the wee hours. A second cause was I did not find out my main goal in life. Getting up, going to school, taking classes, going home, having dinner, taking shower and then going to bed – my life was completely occupied by these dull, fixed and regular trifles. I had never imagined how boring the life would be, just like having dishes without any condiment. Sometimes I would ponder long and deeply where my future was, what I should do. When I felt wearier of these trifles things, I was more easily be distracted by my amusements. A final cause is – I LOVE NIGHTS! I greatly enjoyed doing many things at a still and black night before I went to bed, such as listening to music or radio, reading novels, watching horror movies, chatting with my younger sister, or even just pondering about something. Sometimes I would do these things all night. 
    However, I started to gradually break up the bad habit of staying up after I became a double-major student. Hence, the first point on my list of New Year’s Resolution is “Get up Early!” Needless to say, I did know the bad influence of staying up on human’s body before; yet the most decisive reason to make me change was – I have already found out my goal in life, the goal that could make me full of energy and hope, go ahead and do not hesitate. Therefore, I wanted to go back to the right pace, so I primarily changed the basic point – lifestyle. As a proverb goes – “The early bird catches the worm.” Morning is truly the most significant time in the whole daytime because human is clearest in the morning. We can do hundreds of meaningful thing effectively and energetically without disturbance before this world awakes from the dawn. Take myself as an example; I used to get up just few hours before the classes began. I was always in a great hurry after awake; therefore, I usually could not have a breakfast. Meanwhile, if there was a test then, I also did not have time to review. Everything is in hurry in order to get to class on time! Nevertheless, something changes after I start to get up early. I have time to enjoy my great breakfast, study, and go to school leisurely. Now I do know what I want, what person I want to be and how I should do, and get up much earlier than one year ago. Although sometimes I may still accidentally stay up and oversleep, I will try my best to thoroughly abandon that bad habit and have a brand new life.


2013-03-20

New Year’s Resolution – Get up Early


    When I was a senior high school student, I needed to get up at 5 o’clock to take buses everyday because of the remote school. After I got into college, I felt I can get more freedom than before. Therefore, I started to let myself loose. I did not almost go to the first class at eight o’clock, because I gradually cannot get up at six o’clock in the latest one year.
    I had a bad habit of doing things dilatorily. Every time after I came home, I was first used to play computer, have a dinner and watch television. When I realized that I had homework to do, it was usually about ten or eleven o’clock. Then I would reluctantly sit at the desk, started to do what I should do. I did not finish my homework until the wee hours. A second cause was I did not find out my main goal in life. Getting up, going to school, taking classes, going home, having dinner, taking shower and then going to bed – my life was completely occupied by these dull, fixed and regular trifles. I had never imagined how boring the life would be, just like having dishes without any condiment. Sometimes I would ponder long and deeply where my future was, what I should do. When I felt wearier of these trifles things, I was more easily be distracted by my amusements. A final cause is – I LOVE NIGHTS! I greatly enjoyed doing many things at a still and black night before I went to bed, such as listening to music or radio, reading novels, watching horror movies, chatting with my younger sister, or even just pondering about something. Sometimes I would do these things all night. 
    However, I started to gradually break up the bad habit of staying up after I became a double-major student. Hence, the first point on my list of New Year’s Resolution is “Get up Early!” Needless to say, I did know the bad influence of staying up on human’s body before; yet the most decisive reason to make me change was – I have already found out my goal in life, the goal that could make me full of energy and hope, go ahead and do not hesitate. Therefore, I wanted to go back to the right pace, so I primarily changed the basic point – lifestyle. As a proverb goes – “The early bird catches the worm.” Morning is truly the most significant time in the whole daytime because human is clearest in the morning. We can do hundreds of meaningful thing effectively and energetically without disturbance before this world awakes from the dawn. Now I do know what I want, what person I want to be and how I should do, and get up much earlier than one year ago. Although sometimes I may still accidentally stay up and oversleep, I will try my best to thoroughly abandon that bad habit and have a brand new life.

2013-03-14

Three Types of Vacation - (2)


PEER REVIEW FOR ESSAYS
  • What part needs the most attention in the next draft?
    1.The conclusion needs to be much longer.
    2.You can use more own examples.
  • COP:spelling error

    There are three types of vacation which are divided from the distance to the destination. The first type is domestic vacation. The domestic vacation usually spent about three days to seven days. Therefore, the cost is comparatively lower; and more scenery we can enjoy. We can leisurely and slowly enjoy the marvelous landscapes. For example, in Taiwan, if we live in Taipei and we want to arrange a domestic vacation, we can go to the midst of Taiwan, such as Taichung, Changhua and Nantou. In addition, we keep going south; we can go to Yunlin, Chiaya and Tainan; until we reach the south district Kaohsiung and Pingtung. Taking the THSR or TRA is the most convenient way we can choose, we can only spend about two to three hours taking the THSR to the farthest district. Driving a car is also an easy and usual way to travel. It cannot be limited by the place where the train or bus cannot arrive. For example, I had a pretty wonderful time with my family this New Year vacation. My parents took us to Changhua, Yunlin and Chiaya to have a three-day family trip. We went to many sightworthy landscape where were not so crowded, such as “寒溪泥”, “萬年峽谷” and “五元二角”. The trip not only cost economically but also gave me countless pleasant memories.  Choosing two or three districts to sightsee does not take too much time and cost. Moreover, we can enjoy the views much deeper.
    The second type of vacation is travelling in the neighbor countries. It generally takes about five days to ten days. Consequently, the cost will be more expensive than the domestic vacation’s cost; but we have a few views due to the higher cost of the air tickets and traveling expenses. Joining a tour group can save us a lot of money; however, we cannot enjoy our free time because of catching up the travel schedule. Most of the Taiwanese will take Korea, Japan, China, Singapore, Indonesia or Malaysia to their first time travel country. In many neighbor countries, I have gone to Indonesia, Malaysia and Thailand since I was a child. I extremely love to travel to the Southeast Asia. The warm and genial sunshine, the pearl-white beach, the tasty and refreshing coconut milk, the lively and lighthearted music and the relaxed and simple lifestyle in Southeast Asia were all my biases and made me linger on with no thought of leaving. If I have enough money and time, I will spend my vacation there again.
The third type of vacation is traveling in the countries which do not belong to Asia. Generally speaking, it takes about ten days or even two months. Therefore, it takes the most money and time; hence, it must have its difficulty. Half of the Taiwanese cannot afford the high payment of traveling to Europe, America even Australia. If we want to reach these places, the first thing we need to solve is the cost of air ticket. It must spend beyond twenty thousands. From the viewpoint of normal Taiwan people, twenty thousand may be their income in a month. Needless to say, the payment of the whole journey must be so high that no normal can afford it. Take myself for an example; I have never gone to the countries which do not belong to Asia. If the whole circumstance was possible for me to go abroad, I must absolutely seize the chance. 
To sum up, the experiences and memories which we get from the journey cannot measure by money. These invisible harvests can widely extend our experiences and knowledge, open our view and even enrich our life. They are fairly significant and just like an irreplaceable treasure in our living. No matter what kind of travel, they must have their values and are worth trying. It is better to travel far than to read voluminously. If in the future you have the chance to travel, no matter foreign or domestic countries, please do not hesitate, just pack up your baggage and then go your way. You will discover you get more that you think!

2013-03-07

Types of vacation

   There are three types of vacation which are divided from the the distance to the destination. The first type is domestic vacation. The domestic vacation usually spent about three days to seven days. Therefore, the cost is comparatively lower; and more scenery we can enjoy. We can leisurely and slowly enjoy the marvelous landscapes. For example, in Taiwan, if we live in Taipei and we want to arrange a domestic vacation, we can go to the midst of Taiwan, such as Taichung, Changhua and Nantou. In addition, we keep going south, we can go to Yunlin, Chiaya and Tainan; unill we reach the south district Kaohsiung and Pingtung. Taking the THSR or TRA is the most convenient way we can choose, we can only spend about two to three hours taking the THSR to the farthest district. Choosing two or three districts to sightsee does not take too much time and cost. Moreover, we can enjoy the views much deeper.
  The second type of vacation is travelling in the neighbor countries. It generally takes about five days to ten days. Consequently, the cost will be more expensive than the domestic vacation’s cost; but we have a few views due to the higher cost of the air tickets and traveling expenses. Joining a tour group can save us a lot of money; however, we can not enjoy our free time because of catching up the travel schedule. Most of the Taiwanese will take Korea, Japan, China, Singapore, Indonesia or Malaysia to their first time travel country.
The third type of vacation is traveling in the countries which do not belong to Asia. Generally speaking, it takes about ten days or even two months. Therefore, it takes the most money and time. However, it must have its difficulty. Half of the Taiwanese can not afford the high payment of traveling to Europe, America even Australia. If we want to reach these places, the first thing we need to solve is the cost of airplane ticket. It must spend beyond twenty thousands. From the viewpoint of normal Taiwan people, twenty thousand may be their income in a month. On the other hand, the experiences and memories which we get from the journey can not measure by money. They are fairly significant and just like an irreplaceable treasure in our life. No matter what kind of travel, it must have its value. These three types of travel are worth trying.